Hi Working Mom,
This poem has a wonderful, huge impact. The tone is informal and lost. Right from the first word the reader is put in touch with the emotions of the speaker. The reader feels great sympathy for the speaker and wishes they could offer comfort. The free verse poetic form works well here and is done very well. The poem has a wonderful flow that makes it a pleasure to read. You have used punctuation and grammar consistently in this poem. There is nothing to distract the reader from enjoying the poem. Great job.