Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: This story does read like a dream. Parts are confusing, and some things are not explained. The story has a good intensity that builds in the story until the end. The style is easy to read.

Characterization: The character who tells the story is not named. The first person narrative brings the reader into the story.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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