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Review by Soh ~ Luminousa Author IconMail Icon
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Hi, debby4fm

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I came across this poem and I could not leave without leaving my opinion.

This is a sweet poem about the beginnings of love. I like the simile that has been drawn for explaining the beauty of the beloved. As the poet goes on gazing at the person, he/she realises that he/she is more beautiful than the rainbow.

My favourite lines are:

The beauty of the rainbow appears only after the rainfall,

but your beauty appears every seconds.

the rainbow bents to salute the level of your beauty.

Suggestions:

I felt that the title was a little too long. Maybe you can shorten it in this way - More beautiful than the rainbow. This is just my suggestion and finally it is up to you whether to change it or not.

Final thoughts:

This is a lovely poem about a fresh love. Thanks for sharing it with us. Keep writing *Smile*

Soh

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