Please remember that the following comments and observations are only my opinions. Take what you can use, but never be shy about discarding what you cannot.

Overall impression: I enjoyed this story, but I found that it became interesting toward the end. I would suggest to add setting detail and character detail to the beginning of the story to create more interest. The idea is a good one and is partly developed, leaving lots of room for more stories in the same world. The style is easy to read.

Characterization: The Teacher tells the story which is an encounter with her student Alcorra. The character of the teacher could use more development. Alcorra is well done and is an interesting character.

Dialogue: Good dialogue that is used effectively to advance the story.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼



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