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| (4.5)| Hi there, ~Lifelessons~ Teerich - 2019 here with a poetry review from the   Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! I am a writer just like you. I am not here to judge you. Please bear in mind that anything I say is just my humble opinion.  It is my honour to read your work. Use whatever you can and send the rest fluttering off into the ether for another day. I am reviewing your Blitz poem, "Invalid Item" today as part of my mission to review Newbies.I found it on The Poets Place   I like the reverence of this prayer-like poem. It appears to be directed at an omnipotent being with its repeated first line. Always Loving, Knowing, Doing I love the contemplative mood you set. The tone is calm and placatory. The Trijan Rhyme Scheme is generally, adhered to. The poem flows smoothly with a lilting rhythm. The form is almost perfectly executed.  this isn't what it is supposed to be. This line has too many syllables.  Suggestion this isn't what it is it's supposed meant to be. Show yourself This refrain line should have four syllables Suggestion Show Reveal yourself I like the overall impression of spirituality that the poem evokes It is comforting to feel that a loving and compassionate being is watching over us e:smile} Thank you so much for allowing me the privilege of reading your work  I hope my remarks are of use to you sincerely, teerich ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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