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Take what you can use, and the throw the rest out to the poetry pixies for use another day.*Fairyl*

Hello GG! I found your poem in the "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. and I am reviewing this as part of my challenge for the "WDC 14th Birthday Sr. Mod. Challenge" Open in new Window.

*Fairyr*This poem is intense. I have never been around drugs, and for that I am thankful. But one of my dearest friends has a husband who is hooked on pain pills. She's talked to me about it a lot. Your poem really puts things into perspective for me. I especially like the picture you've added with the poem. Your introduction is awesome and goes well with the content.

I only have suggestion... I love this verse, but what do you think about my punctuation changes?

For those around her never hear her cries,
nor do they know inside she slowly dies
each time a fix brings pleasure from its whore.
She stands alone.

For those around her never hear her cries,
nor do they know inside she slowly dies.
Each time a fix brings pleasure from its whore,
she stands alone.

This is how I read it. I had a harder time reading it with your breaks. It's just a thought.

I could go through and point out all your wonderful use of poetic devices, etc. but I think you know what those are. *Smile* Your poetry skills are impeccable, and I always enjoy what you write! *Thumbsupl* Keep up the great work.


Sincerely,
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