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 AI Chapter 1 Open in new Window. [ASR]
Alexa has joined a program designed to enhance humans and taken on the related risks.
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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The story so far is intriguing, AI enhancements will give you a lot of room for creativity. The dialogue between the character's is well done and I think you've done a great job of capturing how age in reflected in how they relate to each other. I did notice the Stiker's name changed to Strider or was that a different character?

You could add more of how Alexa feels as she adapts to her AI changes, it would help us become more familiar with her character.

Nicely done, I look forward to reading more.

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