Oh I like this! I really like the way you took the original tale of Hansel and Gretel and changed it slightly to a more modern twist. Also the use of the step-mother as the witch was awesome!

At the very end when Father is speaking--his very last line? I'm not sure about that one. What is it? Was he speaking to Clara? That hung me up a little.

Also was there a particular reason you used single quotes? I find those difficult to read.

Other than that, I didn't see any grammar issues! Brilliant job.