Review number # 5 of week August 28- Sept. 3, 2014

Hi Misty

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Little Child Lost

First Impression: My heart breaks for you as I read. I am so sorry for your loss. What a beautiful way to express the love you both shared.

What I liked: How beautifully you expressed your thoughts in each stanza, they flowed together beautifully.

What needs your attention: Nothing, Misty, it is excellent as is. One thing, I would re-space your name at the conclusion so it is not split. But maybe you intended it that way to show a broken Misty.

Favorite Parts: Even though you are a Mama yourself. One you are coping with the loss of your Mama and you also have the realization of your own child. It is so difficult holding your own child imagining how they would feel with out you. None of us likes to think we are not immortal and eventually we will pass as well. We never prepare ourselves for that incredible void in our lives when it does happen. I know you will always remember how much she loved you.

Overall Impression: Beautifully expressed, I cried as I read.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my immense pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .