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 So long Stan Open in new Window. [E]
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I really like the descriptions you've got here. You've only got a few words to convey everything and you still manage to capture her lack of interest and her dissatisfaction with the events happening in the story. That is fantastic!

Just one grammar suggestion indifferently not indifferent.
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