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** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** *BalloonR* Your Decuain form poem reads like a song, music and it references "a fading heartbeat's music, as it dies".

You have successfully followed the rhym scheme required where the first then the final two lines rhyme. I found that to be a most interesting set and wonder why the form designer set them so far apart in the scheme of things.

In appearance of 'free verse', the form as you've followed it per number of syllables appears to vary in meter and rhythm, but they fit the Decuain form even though appearing longer or shorter lines.

My favorite line is ""They do not judge my hunter's heart."

You've written a complex poem linking the brightness of the sky to the hunter's seeking his prize "as the music dies."

Keep writing.

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