Review number # 2 of week Aug.28-Sept. 3, 2014

Hi Stephanie,

My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive.

Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! Please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!

Title: Heat Rises

First Impression: My heart breaks for the author. I am so sorry.

What I liked: The recognition of how we really treat each other. I know we don't mean to be so cranky. We forget to say goodbye or I love you. The author reminds me and hopefully many others how easily things can change.

What needs your attention: The spacing is to far apart, it would b easier to read if it was closer together.
In this sentence, The breaks went out. Breaks should be spelled brakes. That is how the car part is spelled.

Favorite Parts: That everyone important in your lives came to be with you. Funerals are difficult, and many people avoid them like the plague.

Overall Impression: I hope this was a cleansing experience, it is hard to carry all of that inside you. I think you did a wonderful job expressing how people really are to each other, and how people cope with such a difficult experience. I remember when my ex-husband died, seeing my children crying with the loss of their Dad but I could not feel a thing. I didn't cry, I stood like stone. It was when I was walking into our old house where our children were born that my knees buckled and the tears flowed like a river. I had lived in that house 7 years without him so it wasn't like it was something new. I was simply going home. I opened the door and all of my pent up emotion finally erupted.

Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
Lyn




My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .