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 Airplane Mode Open in new Window. [E]
in-complete novel trial I'd appreciate ur review & whether I shall continue write? Thanks
by K.B Author Icon
Review of Airplane Mode  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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First Thoughts

I am reviewing "Airplane Mode" Open in new Window. for "WDC 14th Birthday Sr. Mod. Challenge" Open in new Window.. The speaker is telling the story rather then showing the actions. The main character is intriguing and sympathetic, he is someone that many people can relate to.

What I liked

I like the main character because he knows he has problems and attempts to solve them by increasing his knowledge.

I also like the way this story ended because it suggested that it may be a romance or a relationship story.

Suggestions For Improvement

I suggest showing the events through the action rather then telling the reader what is happening.

Final Thoughts

This character and story have a great deal of potential. Write on.

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