Initial hook and title: Hey I saw this in the Read a Newbie page and wanted to stop by and check it out.


What I liked:

This monologue is a really emotional piece. It's full of your raw emotion and it works so well because you have not been afraid to express yourself at all. It flows really well and the descriptions you have used throughout make sure the reader knows just where you were at that awful time in your life. I think even the repetition of the darkness and the fog works so well.

You have created something beautiful here, a reminder of the struggle you have come through and survived. You should be proud of yourself

And thank you for sharing such a personal piece close to your heart.



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