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 Greetings, gardengirl I am here with A Muse Masters Micro Review of your poem, "Invalid Item"  , from "Invalid Entry" Please keep in mind that these comments are just my opinion.  Impressions: I love the comparison of autumn leaves and fallen soldiers. It's an original and touching idea and very effective as a poem in haiku form. The picture is almost part of the poem - it is necessary to reveal the other meaning, the opposite side of the coin. The picture is what made this poem so beautiful. I'm wondering, though, if this is a good thing? Shouldn't the poem stand by itself? I would love to see you expand on this work - photograph the autumn tree in words instead of an image. I especially love the imagery. So much metaphor packed into three lines with only 17 syllables. First the "bodies", then "flames", then "birds". Linked together, these three create such a vivid picture, complimented with surreal and hazy yet violent action words like "fall", "burst" and "twisting". A very visual poem. I really like that aspect.  Oh, and let's not forget the title - fantastic! It caught my attention straight away, and I think it adds another layer to the poem. Anyway, thanks for sharing! I hope you find my feedback helpful and encouraging, and I look forward to reading more. Fi  Write On! ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/01/2014 @ 6:02am EDT