Hi Dana! I'm not a reviewer normally...I don't have a template for it and I'm just offering my opinion. So take this just as my impression and nothing more.

I love "The Writer's Cramp"! When I first joined WDC I used to enter it all the time with random poems. I was hoping to see a poem here, because that's what I normally find myself drawn to, but I can read a story too.

This is an enthralling read! I do wanna make a couple points though. I was told once that repeating words in a paragraph was a bad thing to do. Example: the use of "reality" in "The next few days passed in a shocked daze of police, his mother’s hysterical weeping and the seemingly endless search for a boy who couldn’t be found. Days bled into weeks that trotted into months as Gareth, with the flexibility of children the world over, adapted to his new reality. He quickly grasped the laws that governed his new reality."

The only other thing I wanted to point out was the misspelling of "Gareth" in the line "Cursing in pain, Garth jerked his hand away...". A simple consistency issue that's easily fixable.

That said, I enjoyed this piece. Thanks for taking part in the 30DBC Summer Camp challenge!



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