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I am doing this review as a judge for "Invalid ItemOpen in new Window.. Do not make any changes to your story until the contest results are announced.

Overall impression: This is a story of horror. There is not a scare factor. It is more of a revelation of what happened. The idea is developed well.

Characterization: Carlie tells the story. Her character is sympathetic and pulls the reader into the story. Each character plays a part that adds to the whole of the story. The interaction between characters is well done.

Dialogue: Good dialogue. It moves the story forward.

Twists and turns: The revelation about Carlie is a good twist.

Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes


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