Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! I am doing this review as a judge for "Invalid Item" . Do not make any changes to your story until the contest results are announced. Overall impression: This is a story of horror. There is not a scare factor. It is more of a revelation of what happened. The idea is developed well. Characterization: Carlie tells the story. Her character is sympathetic and pulls the reader into the story. Each character plays a part that adds to the whole of the story. The interaction between characters is well done. Dialogue: Good dialogue. It moves the story forward. Twists and turns: The revelation about Carlie is a good twist. Area(s) for improvement: I have some suggestions. notes ▼ When you have a chance stop by "Invalid Item" Then write a story and enter for a chance to win. Thanks, on behalf of pinkbarbie and Paul. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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