Love Story Ten Thousand Miles Away [E] The longing to see each other face to face is expressed out of the abundance of the heart. |
A pleasant hour QueenOwl Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" I'm a friend here Samberine Everose And thank you for your interest in joining the contest"A Great Value of Expressions" and this is one of my gifts for you, reviewing your piece I've found in your Portfolio. Please remember that I‘m not a professional or expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion as a reader who just like to read and appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their works. Try to chew and just ignore it, if doesn’t fit to your taste. WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE: Title: Every title of a piece is so important, it is the one that can entice a reader. The title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader,because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance before reading a piece. I already have a clue about the given title- its about a long distance love affair- and that the one that hook me to read it. Imagery - a well crafted words and if properly used can create a subtle or vivid in imagery.The proper chosen of words to express or to show the meaning of the piece can create a well and balance imagery that let the reader be a part of the piece and and can also evokes tone and emotions. The words you weaved are good to me,in which it creates a vivid imagery and evokes emotions like longing and sweetness, just like I relate this to every dream of a princess waiting for her prince charming. I think this as a combination of classic and modern days. The use of places or modern places and words like princess from fairy tales, it blends properly with the created theme or subject in between the two lovers. Rhyme and Rhythm: This is one also of the important part of a piece. The Rhyme when it was properly used can be pleasing to the ear specially when it read aloud, it was fun to create, testing the wit of the writer, and the rhythm and even line breaks can stimulate emotions and will set well the imagery presented. There are some rhyming on some lines and some are not, but for me its good because its blend with the created rhythm- like breaking of lines and form of the stanza. MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION : I didn't find any words that can distract the flow and no doubt arise. I just have a thought about the title-using the word Love Story. I just think there is no need to add already this, because it was seen there in the genre that this is about love or romance. MY FINAL REFLECTION : Modern days are -in as of now. But I still believed in fairy tales of once upon a time, and they live happily ever after.That is the image I've seen here in you piece. Ten thousand miles away will make abundance for the two hearts. Thank you for sharing your piece, I enjoyed reading and reviewing it. Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future. Everyone have its own gift and talent, God made us unique. Its within us, if we want to improve and share. So write on, and always share this wonderful talent you have. Until next time.
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