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| A pleasant hour cornel Punk   Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! A Greetings from the "Invalid Item" I'm your friend here Samberine Everose .I've found your piece while roaming around in your Portfolio, so I'm here, giving you a review.I hope I can bring you a smile. Please remember that I'm not a professional writer or an expert in reviewing, anything I say here is just only my humble opinion and thought as a reader who like to read and always appreciate the uniqueness of others thru their writing craft. Try to chew and please ignore it, if doesn't fit to your taste.  WHAT CAN I SAY ABOUT THE:Title: Every title of a piece is so important, because it is the captivating part of it, the title should have a magnetic charm that can allure a reader, because it is the first thing in which a reader have their first glance and have their first impression before having a read to a piece. The title of your piece is good for me, it is intriguing, the word wrestling hook me, I already have an idea what is this all about but i'd like to know if what you really mean about "wrestling" of dogs. Imagery - A well crafted words when it was properly used can create a subtle or vivid in imagery. A proper chosen of words can evokes and stir emotions, especially if the piece already grasp the attention and thought of the reader. The words you weaved is vivid to me, You used words that stimulate the emotion like thrill, excited, and suspense, just like watching a sport or a wrestling. the only different is instead of human, they are dogs who are playing wrestling.Rhyme and Rhythm: When it was properly chosen and properly used by the words that was intently used can be pleasing to the ear when it read aloud and fun to create testing the wit of the writer, and even the use of line breaks as a part of rhythm can stimulate emotions and will set the imagery as presented. This is not a rhyming poetry, but I liked the rhythm that was created. It blends with the created tone.  MY DOUBT AND SUGGESTION :I didn't find any words that can distract the flow  Just some punctuation in the brief description because it is a quote about what you think in playing dogs and this is the one that enticed me to read it. And in line 15 space between the word ontop .  MY FINAL REFLECTION :When dogs play they are not really like scorpion, They just play to have fun, no hurt feelings created. And I also relate that to sportsmanship. Thanks for sharing your piece and for allowing me to drop some review.It's my pleasure to have read and gave my review. Hoping to see again more works of yours in the future. Everyone have its own gift and talent, God made us unique. Its within us, if we want to improve and share. So write on,  and always share this wonderful talent you have. Until next time. ** Image ID #1979236 Unavailable **  
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