Hi David,

I'm reviewing for "I Write Romantic in Winter" 

Title: I like the title. I feel like completing it with my own words ". . .it happened." I fount it relevant to the story.

Characters and plot: I found the characters believable; the girl keeping her fantasies to herself since David was married and David going to her for support due to being frustrated about his marriage. I also like the physical description of the characters.

Sizzle: I thought it was well done. It all started from her leaning against him due to her fear of thunder. Being as attracted to her as she was to him, their responses and desires seemed mutual.

Spelling, punctuation and grammar: This needs a bit of work. I have some suggestions below:
I was used to dating men who would lie, cheat and steal
He thanked me and went out to his car and got a bag of clothes he had packed before he left and asked . . Replace the 'and' with commas since it was a sequence of David's actions.

I really enjoyed reading this piece. Best of luck in the contest.

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My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .