Overall Impressions:

This was a wonderful emotional roller coaster of a poem. I started out feeling a bit upset wondering why he was running, to feeling scared for him, then proud of him. Great poem to honor our veteran's!

Form:


The form consisted of 18 lines with 3 stanzas with 6 lines each


Rhythm:


Despite the fact that there's no consistent rhythmic meter that I could notice, it still read out loud very well, I enjoyed the beat my voice went into as I read it. It feels like there's rhythm, so job well done.

Rhyme and Rhyme Scheme:


Rhyme scheme is as follows:

abbcbb, deedee, fghfgg

Wow I was surprised there was a different rhyme scheme in each stanza. Being a newbie at poetry form etc, I wasn't sure it was "OK" to mix rhyming schemes in a poem. But it worked well and flowed with the story


Imagery:


As it began in the first stanza, this poem I thought it was a soldier running from battle. We here about it in movies, I was't sure if it ever really happened but I assumed he was frightened by a close grenade or fire near by. The mention of regret made me think he ran instead of standing his ground.

In the second stanza my first thoughts seemed to be emphasized and yet it still sounded like he was running to safety.

The third stanza pulled at my heart strings very strongly as I realized whay he was doing. Tears came to my eyes and it pulled everything together really well.

Great imagery for such a short piece, nicely done.


Favorite Parts:



The third stanza by far was my favorite, a true hero, to save his fellow soldier.


Suggestions:

No suggestions you did a great job of pulling me through this poem line by line stanza by stanza.


Additional Comments:

It amazes me the creativity you come up with and the imagery you can create with so ew words in your poetry. Deep feelings and morals felt through out even when sneakily hidden. Wonderful job!


I enjoyed reading your work and hope my review was helpful and encouraging!!!

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