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 Mommy Dearest Open in new Window. [XGC]
Mom and son have a time
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Review by dblameck (David) Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: XGC | (3.5)
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Review of Mommy Dearesr

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A story where a seventeen year olf boy attacks his forty year old mother and eventually rapes her. it is not the kind of story that I usually emjoy. Note this story is more about seduction. This is rape. Rape is not love and while sex is involved I don't feel that it has any redeeming factors.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The plot is straight forward. He wants to have sex with his mother and will do anything to make that happen. He feels when he accomplishes that she will become his sex slave. The characters are adequately defined.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

For my way of thinking is drop the forceful rape and try to work on seduction.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing. There is potential in this story.

dblameck
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