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Review of The Reception

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I enjoyed your story of the asian woman going to a reception at a boring conference and preparing herself to have a sexual encounter. Again we see the female being in control of the situation. I found the entire erotic action of the story well detailed and stimulating.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A reception at a boring conference and most of the people are not what Casey would find attractive but she finally finds a married man who will flirt and play. She overwhelms him and gets him initially to have voyeaur sex on a patio, I found this portion of the story to be the best erotic action of the entire document. they continue the fucking in her room (she wants to maintain control} More physical descriptions would be a benefit.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I would have liked to see more physical detail of the characters. The physical details of their copulation could also be enhanced,

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I consider this a very good story.{c}

dblameck
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