Hello Bri*Star ,

I am reviewing your work as a judge for "CLASH! "  [13+]. The following are all my opinions for you to heed or discard as you please.

Character:

What I like: I like the uniqueness of the character's species with the angelic wings. It makes the fact that your character's have been removed intriguing.

What I'd like to see improved upon: Level-headed and reckless are opposite. Might want to reconsider using both terms in the description.


Story:

What I like: You put the reader in immediate action and your character in peril from the start. This made me want to keep reading.

What I'd like to see improved upon: The melodrama of the Empress' death made me giggle instead of feel compassion. Some of the action was a bit confusing.


Good luck in the tournament.

Best regards,

Gary


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .