Hello ,

I am reviewing your work as a judge for "CLASH! "  [13+]. The following are all my opinions for you to heed or discard as you please.

Character:

What I like:The fact that the main character is a child.

What I'd like to see improved upon:I would have liked the character 'sketch' to not be a story on its own.


Story:

What I like:The excitement and exuberance the character gives me as the reader.

What I'd like to see improved upon:The prose is too heavy on the adverbs.


Good luck in the tournament.

Best regards,

Gary


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .