I selected your story to review through the “Read a Newbie Forum” of WdC.
It is my pleasure to welcome you to Writing.com where I believe your work will be received with great appreciation.
 
It was a real pleasure reading your work and I am glad to give you some impressions I have of your piece as well as a short review.
 
My review is based solely on my opinion and feelings. While I may suggest some structural alterations, I prefer to lend my feelings and impressions about a story in the hopes that they may be of some help and encourage further thought about what has been created. Please take what you think is appropriate for your work and disregard the rest.
 
Overall Impression
 
Her home begins as the waters and the woods. Her occupation is to sing songs and captivate the unsure men of the world who give their lives for the sake of the siren’s song. But Echo is stricken herself one day and begins the process of her banishment to the deep recesses of the earth. The wonder of Echo's tale is how well it parallels the real life drives and passions of my soul. Eternally the soul of man is destined to become wedded to lusts and cravings and then at last obsession. The tale, while cautionary and dark, is a well written exploration into the motives and powers that bind humanity to calamity, guilt and shame.
 
Interest and Pace
 
Echo is a delight to be with. I have given in to her myself. I’ve lusted after the spritely nymph whose song promises heaven and bliss. She still resonates in my soul, though my desire to possess her killed me. And in the end she cost me a price more dear than my own life. So I am in your story, working out my own journey to illusive love. I am truly your captive audience. The pace of the story is consistently spot on and I am immersed easily into Echo’s story.
 
Structure and Clarity
 
I like the formation of the story. The long paragraphs at the beginning set up my mind to be relaxed with the character of Echo and enjoy the Siren’s perspective of how men give themselves over to her gentle compliant form of execution. Then the story moves quickly, as the nymph herself becomes entwined in a hopeless, agonizing love of her own. The story evolves quickly and clearly into the "captor becoming the captive" and I appreciate the writing that leads me to appeal on behalf of the nymph that she be spared, even though my own soul has been destroyed by one so much like her.
Edits/Revisions
 
Your story was well wrtten and I was not aware of any need for edits or revisions.
 
Summary
 
Until she meets Narcissist, Echo is content to live the life of a predator. She has fully justified her existence and views her life as the natural way of the cosmos. But her own obsession leads to the loss of her song and the ability to create and to snare her prey freely. She at last can only do one thing to find solace and that is to hide in the darkest remotest place she can find.
 
Your story awakened for me the struggles within my own soul. Mythical and yet tragically real.
 
Thank you.
 
~Kenword~
 
 
 
   This review is given in honor of:

FORUM

AFaith's Unofficial Account BDay Event  (E) CLOSED - My UAB R/CE Starts November 1st! Come help me celebrate by showing thanks! #1955910 by A*Monaing*Faith

 

    Come cast a vote for this years Mr./Miss Thankfulness!
 

101@101513

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .