I selected your story to review through the Read a Newbie Forum at WdC. Welcome to Writing.com. I believe this to be one of the most supportive writing forums on the internet and I hope your experience here will spark creativity and joy for your writing. It was a real pleasure reading your story and I am glad to give you some impressions I have of your piece as well as a short review.
 
My review is based solely on my opinion and feelings. While I may suggest some structural alterations, I prefer to lend my feelings and impressions about a story in the hopes that they may be of some help and encourage further thought about what has been created. Please take what you think is appropriate for your work and disregard the rest.
 

Overall Impression
There is a CoOp that has the power over the entities in space who remain a mystery to the reader of the “UnNamed” but whose actions set up the search for another little known power in the universe. “Some say they are born from the black holes of the oldest galaxies, while others say they are born from the dying suns of the first stars to blink into being.” The reader is challenged with the explorer to get past those who have little memory of their encounter with the UnNamed, to actually come face to face with them. It is a terrifying experience and I am left haunted by the explorers discovery.
 
Interest and Pace
The mystery of where everything began is set in the first paragraph of your story. I am provoked to read more to gauge what kind of mystery needs to be uncovered. Because this a back story for something else, I can enjoy the course of your descriptions without worry of where the main character has been and where they are going. The pace seems about right for a back story piece as a lot of detail has to be interjected into the tale to bring believability onto the scene.
 
Structure and Clarity
With all back story pieces the challenge is to get the essential points of the plot correctly drawn and keep everything clear without losing the interest and pace of the story. I think this is an area for improvement for your story. How the main character comes to the point of seeking the UnNamed is less important than who these creatures are. I would suggest that the story would be clearer if the paragraph about the various names for the UnNamed were pushed to the beginning. The paragraphs seem a little long. Perhaps varying the lenght occassionally would make it easier for the reader to move along smoothly. Your prose is strong, but if there was a way to interject more emotion into the earlier parts of the piece I think the power of the story would increase. There could be more sights, sounds, smells, tastes earlier in the story to keep my human inquisitiveness ramped up.
 
Edits/Revisions
This was the one edit I came a cross. I believe you need the word “to” in this sentence to make it read correctly, ” I knew I would have___ try and figure out why everyone was so quick to oblige this strange order from the CoOp.” The rest of your story is well done. The only revisions are those that I suggested earlier.
 
Summary
We join the main character as he/she comes to a near cataclysmic encounter with the UnNamed. It is a force that destroyed many civilizations on many planets and it can give you the "mind video" of all of their destructive raids if you dare step into their presence for a few moments. The interaction between the UnNamed and the main character is extremely engaging and a fresh original way to see history of universal hatred gone mad.
 
 
Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your story. Keep up the strong writing.
 
~Kenword~
 
 
 
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