Greetings, PandaPaws Licensed VetTech !

As many times as we have interacted in the "The Poet's Place "  group, I never realized that you were a newbie in this wondrous writing community. You have certainly found your way around this vast universe very quickly.

Your title lures prospective readers into the realm of your imagination very effectively with its provocative implications.

The metaphoric imagery and personification of an abstract concept creates a solid vision to which the reader can easily connect and become a virtual participant in this gripping experience.

The selection of the Rondeau form was an excellent choice, because the tight pattern of rhyming and repetition projects a powerful tone of intensity.

The rhyming is very well executed with a natural flow of the language without any distortion whatsoever.

The use of the present participle (-ing) forms of the verbs, especially so many in quick succession, instead of the direct present tense, weakens the expression a bit, in my humble opinion.

I am also not a fan of the stylistic practice of beginning each line with upper case letters. It seems confusing and interrupts the pacing.

Nonetheless, you have composed a powerful poem that sends a valuable message. Write on!

Here’s wishing you fair winds as you continue to navigate this universe known as Writing.Com.

Let the creativity flow from your soul!
Dave
"The Poet's Place " 



My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .