The first paragraph aroused my curiosity and drew me into the story. I wanted to know why Audrey was walking to the hospital. Audrey is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

In this phrase, were a shaky, I suggest deleting the a because it is unnecessary.

In this phrase, happen Colin, I suggest inserting to in front of Colin.

This story left several questions in my mind because I am curious about what happened to Mae and what was going to happen to Colin.

I like the metaphor suggested by the title of honey as a river flowing through life. This is a story with a great deal of potential. Write on.




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