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World Builders, LLC Open in new Window. [E]
Creating worlds in your image, one day at a time.
by Jeff Author Icon
Review by Noyoki Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello socalscrib

My Thoughts:

*Laughs* Thank you for this. I was in need of a good laugh today and this was the best way to start the morning. Everyone has heard of the creation story, but you took it in an entirely different direction. The odds of Earth being the only planet in all the universe to support life is hard to believe, and you were able to take that concept and run with it. After all, a God needs to focus on so many different things, why not outsource a little?

My Favorite Part:

I enjoy how this reads like a promotional; it fit the flow of a commercial, lending it a familiarity that gave it a greater weight and believability. It wasn't too stuffy, but still had the sale's man's voice that we've all grown up with.

My Suggestions:

One thing I would love to see is an actual form showing all the different options one could get when purchasing their own planet. (Just five easy payments of $19.95, upgrades not included).

This was very humorous and I liked the twist to an old story.

Thank you,

~Noyoki

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