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Rated: E | (3.0)
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First of all, let me say that this is not the sort of thing that I would normally review. I had to look up the format for the Goethe Stanza, and now that I have seen it, I am not sure that I would ever want to use it. The rhyme scheme of single lines and couplets which alternate in rhyme sounds very disjointed to me, and the fact that there is no set syllable count has the potential to make it more disjointed.

That said, I did enjoy many of the images which you created in this poem, particularly the "shop's neons" and the "fluffy clouds" with silver linings.

Ironically, I think the last line is a little bit out of sync, but that's another example of the awkwardness of this form.

Alex
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