Hi Tessa I have just read your work "Invalid Item" and here is my review of this poem I and sending you this, in a hope that my humble opinion as a reader can be useful to you. Overall impression : You used great description and created a touching poem. I love the theme, as you really described love in its pure form. The ending describes it all -even though it hurts when your loved ones go, you should never regret to have loved anyone. Structure/ Form : The structure was simple and effective, and I didn't see any specific poetry forms here. I did however find that in some stanzas you had a mix of long and then short lines and then long lines again that somehow interrupted the steady flow and rhythm. Best part : As I said I really appreciated your wording since you created great imagery, I could see the parchment paper hands, the elfin face, the drool glistening.. Such good stuff! Even though this in a way is a sad poem, you gave it a fitting ending to inspire and that left me with a lovely sentiment. This was a great read. Thank you for sharing your work. I look forward to reading more soon. Samantha sssam-on the way back
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