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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi there. I found your entry on "I Write in December-January-February" Open in new Window.. Please note that these are my views as a reader and are not meant to offend in any manner.

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Imagery Created

Your poem created a heart-touching picture of siblings who fight, yet still are the best friends. It goes perfectly with the prompt.

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Language, grammar and form

You have packed a lot many emotions in quite a few words. I could not see any definite form, but the rhythm of the poem flowed well. I only have a small suggestion. In the sentence, "I know its so because you care", you have used "its" which should be "it's" as in "it is". Other than this, there is no change needed in the poem.

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Punctuation

You have not followed any punctuation in the poem, but that does not jar the reading or flow of the poem. Sentence breaks convey the meaning sufficiently.

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Favorites and Not-so-Favorites

The idea of "slap being harder because of love" made me smile because of its realistic point.

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Other thoughts and suggestions

No suggestions as such. It's a fine entry for the contest. Wish you all the best.

Keep Writing!! *Thumbsup*

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