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Given: Jan 11, 2013 at 12:34am
Length: 1,177 Characters |
1,063 w/o WritingML
Hi afaith
I have just read your item "Flash Fiction Book" and these are my humble comments.
First Impression:
This is a good read. I too am a stubborn woman I can really relate to your story. I sometimes overdo it when trying to prove to myself that I can do it just like the others (especially when its a male/female issue)!
I really enjoyed the ending since you neatly tied up the "one minute" theme, and also made me aware of how some of us overdo it in order to prove something that is probable not even necessary to do..
Plot / Characters:
For such a short story you did well. I was enticed early on and kept entertained until the last minute. I got a good impression of your lead character and really enjoyed sharing her thoughts. It is a shame it was such a short story since I would have liked to know more.
Structure & Grammar:
I only stumbled on the the second line. "press 200-lbs for reps in" I am thinking that the word for might not be necessary in that sentence.
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