Hi there, Weirdone-Back in the games . I found your item in "I Write in December-January-February" . Before I begin my review, please note that these are my views as a reader and are not meant to offend in any manner.

Imagery Created

A really funny poem of Empat, Empat form. It shows the woes of a child about the ban on chewing gums in schools.I enjoyed the way each line flowed in another without feeling forced.

Language, grammar and form

You have followed the form nicely. The rhymes also flow without jarring. Mostly the poem is well edited. I just have a small suggestion:
Which one had always to obey. ~ I feel it should be "always had to obey". Right now it doesn't flow well.

Punctuation

Well-punctuated apart form the first letter capitalization. But I do not have any issues with it.

Favorites and Not-so-Favorites

Last stanza, which is too funny and shows what I feel too, though about keeping quiet rather than chewing gums.

I am giving this poem four and a half stars. Thank you for writing and sharing your work.

Keep Writing.

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