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*Reading* Initial hook: hilarious resolution about the new year made and broken before the new year

*Tiedye4* Speaker(s)/Flow:flowed really well with the repeating line, the rhymes helped a lot

*Butterflyb* Atmosphere/Tone/Mood:persistent, hopeful, ...sleepy

*Suitheart* What I liked: the whole idea, rhyme scheme,

*Tools* A few comments/suggestions I had:

(Original quotes will be in black, any changes or suggestions I'll make in blue to make it clear)


*BulletG*washed it down with champagne and some fine beer.
washed it down with champagne and some fine beer.

*BulletB*I hear Dick Clark way off in the distance
is this to establish that the speaker is dreaming or was this New Years last year?

Hope this helped! Great job on a great piece of readable art!!!

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