Hi there,gardengirl.This is an anniversary review on behalf of "Invalid Item" . Before I begin please note that these are my views as a reader and are not meant to offend in any manner.

Imagery Created

Your poem told a story, weaving scenes after scenes. First of the love felt, then the pain of being ignored and then the self-hatred and compulsion of accepting the bits and pieces. It was like I was standing there seeing all that. Amazing poem! Totally loved it.

Language, grammar and form

Free verse language. Everything flows perfectly without distracting. Only one question, you meant "verses" or "versus"? I think it should be "versus". Verses means the poetry while versus means against. For example "It is a famous verse of a poem" and "It is India versus England today on TV." You may want to crosscheck what you wish to use finally.

Punctuation

Perfect

Favorites

So I stay and eat....the burning void beneath my flesh.
This whole para was my favorite. So realistic and such a creative way of expressing the feelings.

Other thoughts and suggestions

There are very few poems which touches the heart in such a way as this. It expresses the sad, sorry but necessary state. I thoroughly enjoyed the poem. Thank you writing and sharing such a beautiful poem. Please do check the usage of the word "verses".I am giving this poem 4.5 starts for its beauty.

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