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*MugBr* Title: Euro 2012

*MugG* Author: Nangwaya-Golden is my sponsor

*MugLP* Reviewed by: KerrieAnnS

*MugLV* First Impression: Not much of a football fan, but I do tend to watch the world cup. I love me some rugby! This poem is full of facts as well as opinions which I think lends it a good balance.

*MugV* What I liked most: The lines:

My hopes are for goals galore,
no matter how they find the back of the net.

Made me think of all those times where goals have come under scrutiny and that has then led to the debate about goal line technology. Such a large area of interest covered in two lines, shows your ability to be concise and hit a topic head on.

My favourite lines have to be:

You know even after my expatriation,
zany as I am, I still find England the best

Purely because after talking about risky tactics and iffy goals you still stand fast behind your nation which is admirable.

*MugR* Suggestions: There are a few lines that I think could benefit from some editing:

hoping they block the free-kick coming in
It's time for Euro 2012.

- These lines seem as if they should be separate, so maybe a full stop after 'in'.

perhaps I may even have a small bet

- I would use the word 'place' instead of have.

risky tactics nearly knocked us out
Since our last game i've felt uneasy.

- These lines seem as if they should be separate, so maybe a full stop after 'out'.

Since our last game i've felt uneasy.
That we may not be in with a shout.

- These lines seem as if they should be as one sentence, so maybe no full stop after 'uneasy'.

zany as I am, I still find England the best

- With this being the end of the poem I think there should be punctuation after 'best' whether that be a full stop or maybe even an exclamation mark.

*MugO* Conclusion: A great poem detailing the facts of the Euro such as its location, England strugggling to qualify etc. The facts are balanced out nicely with your opinions regarding iffy goals, betting and chances of wining. Finally I think you round the whole piece of nicely stating your strong following of your team.

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