Welcome to WDC from "Newbie Welcome Wagon" ! Note To The Author: None of this review is personal. It is just my opinion, nothing more. I'm sorry if you actually feel this way. I'm sure your parents, siblings or friends care. Still, I know how it feels. Sometimes you just feel that no one cares. But I assume that is just a temporary feeling. I hope so anyway. Still, sometimes it just feels good to feel sad. As long as it is just temporary, and not a serious issue. It is interesting that at first you mention the highs (soaring)but then quickly introduce the fall. I suppose you want to show how that sudden change feels, and how deep the descent is. As I said before, I hope there are people who are there for you. Also, I hope you are there for yourself. A some point, if there is no one, we have to be there for ourselves. I do like the repetition in each stanza, how you reintroduce the keyword in line one, in line two. Generally I don't like repetitive words in poetry, but it seems to work here. The last stanza to me is the weakest, as it tends too be a little affected. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** }
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