Review of showering acts of joy member to member

Why I chose this piece: Anniversary

Overall impression of piece: A vaery graphic piece. I get this. It is not just visually stunning, I get the feeling of being completely overpowered by the situation

Grammatical and spelling errors: Freezing my butt off is a clause that modifies. I would suggest a comma to separate it off. Life was horrible sentence just seems to go and on. I think you could have a comma after horrible. it is like a mantra for the age. Best-shaped and crystal-lipped need hyphens

What I liked? I sense this. I feel it. It has been very hot where we live in the desert, but it doesn't matter. I have been to the ocean and it is identifiable. This is a great picture. I couldn't have chosen it better. You gave me a good reason why you wrote this. I could see where you were going

What I disliked: Just the grammatical up above.

How the piece made me feel: Fantastics, a musical has poetry that says
Celebrate sensation
You've been there.
You remember.
For once in your crowded sunlit existence,
You hid away fromm the tyranny of time
And love was sweeter than the berries
Or the stinging taste of Mint

I feel some of the same sensation s from reading your piece.

Hope this helps. Use my ideas as your creativity alchemy deems fitting

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