A present for who? [E] for contest |
** Image ID #1864499 Unavailable ** HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews" Hi Ginny, I carefully read your poem, here is my review. Please remember, I'm a writer just like you and these are only my impressions. My ultimate goal is to be helpful and supportive. Thanks for sharing your work. TITLE: "A present for who?" is the name of this poem. It fits. Narrative & Dialogue: The author is giving a narrative. What present do I pick out for this woman I don't know? My boss or could it be friend wants me to pick it out. Now what do I do? If I really don't know her, there's so many questions that enter my mind. This is a task I'm glad I don't get asked to do too often. Form & Flow:The form is rhyming every other line. The flow is smooth as the author ponders the choices to make. Imagery & Emotion: The imagery is in each and every line as the author checks off the items that could help her make the right choice in a gift. The emotion shown is puzzlement, anxiousness in doing the right thing and finally success, the last stanza hits on what she figures out to be the right choice. Suggestions & Typos: I found one error that I would like to bring to your attention. not to expensive--Not too expensive, too should have one extra "o" Overall Thoughts & Rating: I thought you did a good job ticking off the many gifts you have in mind and finally getting to the choice at the end. The poem sound great to me all the way through. Thanks for sharing this item! I only review things that I enjoy reading and I truly did enjoy this piece. FAVORITE LINE: I do have a favortie line below. Maybe a nice card a flower or two a small book of poetry and that all should do JUST MY PERSONAL OPINION: You made your choice in gift, something simple as a flower, book of poetry and a card. Who wouldn't like that as a gift. It's perfect! Write On! My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" . Take care now, keep on writing, I’ll keep on reading, Jeannie
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