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It’s a prose piece about hope and faith. A blind girl, a faithful believer in God has a dream. In that dream she asks God to heal her. Though she wakes up before he accepts or rejects her claim, it’s enough to give her hope, and in her own words, she, “knew that one day God will heal me.”

I can look at this tale from several different points-of-view. It can certainly be seen as a tale of faith. That if we only believe, God will answer our pleas. It can also be seen as hope. The young girl, wants so badly to see, and so she holds out hope for a cure. There is a third way to look at this story, however. In this way, blind faith is questioned. It shows how we hold out hope, even when logic dictates its impossibility. It comes to dominate our thinking and way of life. It isn’t important which one I ascribe to, though I/m sure you meant it from the aspect of faith.

There are a number of issues in this small piece, mainly spelling irregularities:

When i was young the doctors tried to fix it

Capitalize, “I” when used in a sentence. You fail to do this seven times in this short tale.

I love to go to church and here about the miracles
“hear” about the miracles.

I saw Jesus and he was surronded by this beatiful light
Two typographical errors here.

“surrounded” and, “beautiful.”
from that day on

“From.” Capitalize the first letter since the word begins a sentence.
will be able to see his glory

“would” be able…” The story is in past tense(I was born…)

Last Words:

As I mentioned before, it is a tale of faith and belief. While different readers can interpret it differently, I’m pretty sure you want readers to see it as one’s faith is God’s greatness. There are times when we all need to believe in something, and for many God fits that requirement.

Since the story is short, I’m guessing it was for a flash fiction contest. However, that aside, this story would benefit from more description, characterization, and basically anything that would add more depth to the story. Though I have a feeling your aim was fairly narrow, hoping to show the beauty of faith, it could be expanded to show the beauty of your art as well.
It’s a nice story, but I think the potential is there for more.