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I like it, it's subtle yet to the point. There are times we want to speak but for any number of reasons, we remain silent. Sometimes it's out of fear of what we might hear in return. I know there are times I keep silent for fear the words I get back will destroy whatever little dream I was holding onto.

I liked this:

So many to cry,
So desperate to utter,
Yet so reluctant,
To make it real.

For it speaks truth, that fear that if we address an issue, it ceases to be just inside our head, and becomes real and then we must address it, and eventually, admit it.

Did you mean, "wailed" in line ten?

It's just a small question, but I wonder if the lie:

Of what remain unspoken.

would be better as, "what remains unspoken," since there is bound to be more than one thing. Like I said, it's just a niggling thought.

The last stanza is effective too, not only is it a creative way to juxtapose the hurt with the silence, but it also that hurt and frustration at not being able (or daring) to speak out.

As I said, I have been there, at least in my own way.

The writing is good, a I said, subtle, more so than most poems of a personal nature, it doesn't pander to the reader, which is a big thing with me.

Long story short: I like it.