Your prosaic piece is poetic in it's own way.
The reader is prompted to consider what you have to say.
That's imagery that draws him/her in.
In a structure and form that provides a good beginning.

Flow is easy going,
Pace hampered slightly by bumps in the road.
Overall impression is that you have written from the heart and you care about the matter at hand.

Suggestions for improvement are along the grammatical line:
Lines 6 and 13 contain "allusive". A better fit would be "elusive".
The pace may be slightly smoother by the insertion of periods where some of your thoughts are complete.

Write on!
Copenator out!