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I like the poem. But think you might work on the title. You've got "breath" and "breathes", "breathing". Is the first thing reader sees. Sort of a turn off for me.
I want something "prettier", you know what I mean? "I bathe in the breathes" sounds awkward to me. But remember, I am only one opinion and yours is the most important of all. Jackie
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