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OVERALL SENSE: You've connected your human spirit to the greatest feeling on earth--love. Wrapped inside your poem is a sense of great loss that touched this reader's heart profoundly, moving me to a higher plane, one where I could actually feel the emotions of a grandmother grieving inside God's heart.

GRAMMAR/SPELLING: I see noting at wrong. Well done!

AREAS FOR IMPROVEMENT: I have absolutely nothing to offer.

You are possessed with a great talent for emoting feelings and drawing your readers into moments of great desperation. I can't imagine the pain involved in losing a child.
You are, in my opinion, a phenomenal writer.
It was nice meeting you and I'm glad I had the opportunity to read your work.
I hope to read lots more.
Lola