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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*NoteR* OVERVIEW:
I can tell that you are really a fan of Leonardo da Vinci. Please just don't get me wrong. The Mona Lisa is the 16th century oil painting created by Leonardo da Vinci. The work of art depicts an enigmatic woman gazing at the viewer, and it is said that if you move across the room while looking into her eyes, they’ll follow you. It is definitely one of the most popular paintings in this entire world and has been the center of many artistic, religious, and theoretical discussions.

*NoteR* FLOW:
The flow of this piece is good and I enjoyed reading it aloud.*Smile*

*NoteR* FAVORITE LINE(S):
Line 8 is my favorite one and you can see that below:

Creativity knows no bounds, you exist to prove

That's correct!

*NoteR* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATION/SPELLING:
I think you did great here. No errors that I could see in your piece.

*NoteR* SUGGESTED IMPROVEMENT:
I suggest you to consider lines 8 and 9 of your poem because I don't think most guys focus on the beauty of a lady. To me I don't consider the beauty but I consider the productivity, creativity, love and care. In line 9 you said, 'Most people love you, never disapprove', so if most then I'm going to tell you, how did you know? Have you ever done a research on that or you just mentioned it? Those are some of my concerns and that I think your explanation in this piece wasn't true in some ways.

*NoteR* OVERALL IMPRESSION:
The impression is good and I liked it because I admire all the works of Leonardo da vinci.

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