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TITLE: Fits the content well.

IMAGERY: Good and vivid. This is a cute piece. A man taking his son to work. A robber is going about robbing a place and his kid wants ice cream. The cop that responds to the robbery has his son too. Both kids want ice cream. So on the way the two men decide ice cream is what is needed to shut the kids up so they can do the business at hand.

TONE: Good depth of feelings. The exchange between characters is very natural and real. Children want what they want no matter what's going on.




FLOW: Flow is good. The word choice is good

OVERALL: Good read. Good job with this. Please keep sharing.

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