Here it is, Shannon. Your review. I don't recall seeing this one when I scanned your port, but I saw the "first place" claim and got real curious, seeing how I had considered entering this very contest. I'm glad I didn't. You've spun a very entertaining tale here (kind of like a Seth Green short), humorous throughout and well deserving of the prize. The only weaknesses that I find (if one can call them that) is that it never is really explained why Pilar invited our poor "hero" in the first place. It is suggested that she might be one of those girls who gets off on being dueled over, but it is left in the air. If that is the case, then she certainly could have picked a better contender. Also, unless it was her intention to incense Jose' by having this poor sap show up in a "mexican" costume, I'm not sure why she would have mentioned the traditional garb at all. Apart from those points, I can offer no suggestions for improving the story. I really enjoyed it and I'll keep an eye out for new stuff you put out there. Thank you for sharing.