I think you're on the right track here. "Slammed" the glass, "waved her hand vigorously," "rapid puffs." I immediately pick up on her sense of impatience, urgency, and nerves. For some reason the line on silence didn't totally resonate with me. It sounds like what a writer might say, less so a character. Just my two cents. There's a lot of tense emotion in this. Nice job!
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